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Air factory and AA rework suggestion
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| 1 | The opening paragraph states problem - I thought the general intention was clear. There is also further explanation under the various headings. There is a structure, with clear headings? Changes are sweeping, yes perhaps that part is true. But the changes only make sense as a group. | 1 | The opening paragraph attempts to state the problem. There is also a structure, with clear headings. Changes are sweeping, yes perhaps that part is true. But the changes only make sense as a group. |