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[i]"real-world physics"[/i] sounds like an exaggeration (a lot of it isn't realistic), "simulated" perhaps?
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[i]"real-world physics"[/i] sounds like an exaggeration (a lot of it isn't realistic), "simulated" perhaps?
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same
deal
with
"realistic
explosions"
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same
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with
"realistic
explosions")
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[quote]Tactical possibilities aren't limited by one's technical ability[/quote]
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[quote]Tactical possibilities aren't limited by one's technical ability[/quote]
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Probably because of my programming hobby, but "technical" here sounds more like "skill with computer code and other such things" than "APM"
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Probably because of my programming hobby, but "technical" here sounds more like "skill with computer code and other such things" than "APM"
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Maybe "dexterity?"
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Maybe "dexterity?"
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(because I'm that kind of person, I tried and failed to come up with phrasing that doesn't imply having things like muscle spasms or blindness won't impact the game at all)
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(because I'm that kind of person, I tried and failed to come up with phrasing that doesn't imply having things like muscle spasms or blindness won't impact the game at all)
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Some minor stuff:
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Some minor stuff:
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[quote]A powerful interface allows players to easily implement their economic, strategic, and tactical decisions[/quote]
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[quote]A powerful interface allows players to easily implement their economic, strategic, and tactical decisions[/quote]
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"execute" would probably be more correct than "implement"
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"execute" would probably be more correct than "implement"
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[i]"Spider walkers"[/i] should be just "Spiders" perhaps
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[i]"Spider walkers"[/i] should be just "Spiders" perhaps
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(also maybe remove Tanks, since to people outside the context of the game it just sounds like a subset of Vehicles)
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(also maybe remove Tanks, since to people outside the context of the game it just sounds like a subset of Vehicles)
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